[ SECRET POST #2945 ]

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⌈ Secret Post #2945 ⌋

Warning: Some secrets are NOT worksafe and may contain SPOILERS.

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[Not a Harem Heaven, It's a Yandere Hell]


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03.
[Game of Thrones]


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04.
[In the Flesh]


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[Hudson Leick as Callisto in Xena, Warrior Princess]


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06.
[Plebcomics]


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07.
[Great British Bake Off]


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08.
[Captain America: The First Avenger]


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09.
[Binan Koukou Chikyuu Bouei-bu LOVE!]


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[Queen]













Notes:

Secrets Left to Post: 02 pages, 048 secrets from Secret Submission Post #421.
Secrets Not Posted: [ 0 - broken links ], [ 0 - not!secrets ], [ 0 - not!fandom ], [ 0 - too big ], [ 0 - repeat ].
Current Secret Submissions Post: here.
Suggestions, comments, and concerns should go here.

Comments

Re: Placeholder for help wording a thing

[philippos42]

I think you have mostly achieved the desired dryness. Most of the adjectives I notice are predicate adjectives, and some of those are really participles.

You could rephrase, "D makes a reference to how upsetting this has been for him," to "D makes a reference to how this has upset him," I guess.

I'm not sure about, "I think this is where it started to get heated." Is that imposing a judgment, or a necessary description?

Similarly the references to loud voices.

Re: Placeholder for help wording a thing

[philippos42]

I guess. I don't really understand the culture you're writing for enough to say. Or rather, I don't know the person who's going to be reading it.

Good luck!

Re: Placeholder for help wording a thing

[(Anonymous)]

I'm happy to help.

Re: Placeholder for help wording a thing

[(Anonymous)]

Somehow the email manages to not describe anything. Was that the route you meant to go?

Re: Placeholder for help wording a thing

[(Anonymous)]

NAYRT

Read through all of them, and I think you get the gist of what happened without drama, but with the necessary details. And yikes, sounds like the guy needs to think about how he contributed to the drama, but once things start getting heated, sometimes rational thinking goes out the window. I've been a bystander to that in a meeting, where it suddenly escalates to boiling point within a minute, and it is NOT fun.

Hope it works out for you with minimal drama!