[ SECRET POST #3157 ]

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⌈ Secret Post #3157 ⌋

Warning: Some secrets are NOT worksafe and may contain SPOILERS.

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Secrets Not Posted: [ 0 - broken links ], [ 1 2 - not!secrets ], [ 0 - not!fandom ], [ 0 - too big ], [ 0 - repeat ].
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Comments

Re: Share your work

[(Anonymous)]

I feel like there's a ton of context that I'm missing on your first piece, but it's not bad. The dynamic between Tybalt and Shiro was well done. From a personal perspective, I think I would have liked to see a little more narrative over dialogue -- particularly in Shiro's ALLCAPS moment. That sentence pulled me out a little bit.

The second one does sound like a fun universe to be playing in.

Re: Share your work

[dani_phantasma]

Thanks! Yeah I should probably add more of it when I update it, which I think I will now especially if it will improve the work. And thanks that really helps.

"The dynamic between Tybalt and Shiro was well done." Oh thank you!

"particularly in Shiro's ALLCAPS moment. That sentence pulled me out a little bit" Ahhh. Okay thanks I should probably revise that.

"The second one does sound like a fun universe to be playing in." Oh thanks again! I originally started with a Treasure Planet-like concept with aspects of magic/sorcery and bits of other worlds all blended together. And aliens.