[ SECRET POST #3209 ]

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⌈ Secret Post #3209 ⌋

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Comments

[silverr]

Completely agree. When I have dialogue-heavy scenes, rather than have

"Statement. Statement," A said.
"Another statement," B said.
"Statement. Question?" C said.
"Question?" D asked.

I first try to break the dialogue with actions, or varying the structure:

"Statement. Statement," A said.
"Another statement," B said as they did something. "Statement."
"Statement," C said, then asked, "Question?"
D asked, "Question?"

And only use words like shouted, retorted, snapped, said stoically, asked peevishly if the emotional tone needs a little boost. (I've not actually done a count, but my gut is that I use something other than said or asked no more than 5% of the time.

Epithets even less. I just did a quick search on my current WIP. 85,000+ words, and *-haired (generally the only epithet I ever use) appears 11 times. Only once is it used for a character whose proper name we already know.