[ SECRET POST #3280 ]

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⌈ Secret Post #3280 ⌋

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Comments

Re: I wonder

[(Anonymous)]

Right, fleshing out characters and environment when describing a completely new experience in a foreign setting is such poor writing.

Re: I wonder

[(Anonymous)]

So good writing is fleshing out every single character who gets a one line mention, regardless of whether they actually matter to the story or not? The line he's mentioned in is ' "Well done, Ron, excellent," said Percy pompously across Harry as "Zabini, Blaise" was made a Slytherin.', I suppose she could have added 'as a black boy named Zabini, Blaise was made a Slytherin' but that's awkwardly phrased, unnecessary, and Harry himself probably isn't even looking at the Sorting Hat at that moment so why would the narration from his POV even mention it.

Re: I wonder

[(Anonymous)]

If it had been written like that "a black boy named Zabini, Blaise, was made a Slytherin" it would not only be awkward but almost offensively othering. People in other parts of this discussion are talking about how JK Rowling devotes paragraphs to telling you when a character isn't white and how that's bad, but she doesn't really do that. Your hypothetical sentence, however, is an example of what it would be like if she did.