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⌈ Secret Post #4025 ⌋

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[soldatsasha]

I think if you're good at writing Whedon-esque dialog that's probably a pretty good foundation to build off of and improve. Writing snappy, clever dialog is actually really hard compared to just writing something in a character's "voice."

I think you just need to focus more on thinking about what each character would actually say and how. I did this is a dialog study exercise a few months ago, where I went through some of my favorite youtubers, podcasters, etc. and tried to figure out how they talk and how they tell jokes. And just kind of listened and brain-stormed. And I came up with things like

Sips: very monotone, jokes are often delivered in the form of dry sentences ex: "do you want 13, 14, or 15 steaks?" while Sjin is counting, rambles a lot, makes obscure references or mixes references, talks over or under people in a constant stream of dialog and jokes while occasionally interjecting into the conversation....

And I did that for a whole bunch of people and then looked at those traits and thought about how they might apply to the characters I was writing. Like maybe the character does always have a snappy comeback but their delivery is really stilted or slow. Or they never have a snappy comeback so when they're talking to a mile-a-minute type person they just get left in the dust. Or some people tell jokes with a really long set-up. Some people don't tell jokes at all. You have to figure out how each person talks, and edit your conversations to reflect that.