[ SECRET POST #155 ]

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⌈ Secret Post #155 ⌋

Warning: Some secrets are NOT worksafe and may contain SPOILERS.

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Secrets Left to Post: 05 pages, 114 secrets from Secret Submission Post #023.
Secrets Not Posted: 0 broken links, 0 not!secrets, 0 not!fandom.
Next Secret Post: Tomorrow, Sunday, June 10th, 2007.
Current Secret Submission Post: Here.
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Comments

[fairness.livejournal.com]

They just don't act like their canon counterparts at all. I'm sick and not up to thinking about specific examples but... yeah, you really just don't seem to have a very good grasp on their personalities. Maybe try replaying KHII/CoM?

[jantra.livejournal.com]

When you are feeling better, I would be very, very honored if you could explain some specific examples? No rush, but I like to know what someone else's thoughts are, since no one seems to be really willing to tell me details.

[fairness.livejournal.com]

I'm sorry, but I really don't think I'd be the right person for the job. Your writing style is very flowery and overdone, and I can't get into the fic. At all. One thing I did notice was that all the character talk similarly - I get no sense of individualism or personality out of their dialogue. Xemnas biting Saix also really struck me as being something Xemnas would never do; though, I've also never understood the appeal of making Saix really animalistic.

I really would advise you to find a beta. I know there would be a lot of people who know Kingdom Hearts II canon a lot better than I do (I'm not really in the fandom anymore, like I said) and who have a lot more patience than I do.