[ SECRET POST #2164 ]

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⌈ Secret Post #2164 ⌋

Warning: Some secrets are NOT worksafe and may contain SPOILERS.

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Notes:

Secrets Left to Post: 02 pages, 044 secrets from Secret Submission Post #309.
Secrets Not Posted: [ 0 - broken links ], [ 0 - not!secrets ], [ 0 - not!fandom ], [ 0 - too big ], [ 0 - repeat ].
Current Secret Submissions Post: here.
Suggestions, comments, and concerns should go here.

Comments

Re: Editing Advice?

[(Anonymous)]

So they have to meet with the rebels AND be aware of the class system AND have political discussions and just- blah.

Really? Do they really have to? I'm sure this is all important information, but having infodump "conversations" about politics and sociology just sounds boring as fuck. Make that shit evident to the *reader* by what happens in your scenes and by extension your characters will see it too.

But please for the love of nice things no lectures on the situation. Very few people want to read that.

Re: Editing Advice?

[(Anonymous)]

You're being kind of bitchy here. No one asked for a critique of the plot, ESPECIALLY one that calls it shit.

Re: Editing Advice?

[(Anonymous)]

It's a political story. It kind of does need some of this stuff. Otherwise the rebels will be like "We're rebelling for no reason!"

There aren't conversations. But they walk up the city and they do see poverty in an alien culture. My problem is it's too long, not that the plot is faulty.

The only conversations involving it have been a couple of characters arguing, but that leads to plot points.

Thanks.