[ SECRET POST #2496 ]

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⌈ Secret Post #2496 ⌋

Warning: Some secrets are NOT worksafe and may contain SPOILERS.

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Comments

AYRT

[(Anonymous)]

Well the death is meant to be a shocking turn of events, in an "It got worse" scenario. (the story starts with the protagonist realizing that the family is being stalked (subtly with it gradually getting worse) and that's why his parents have suddenly changed and become more anxious in cautious.

It's told through the perspective of the protagonist and his little brother,and how each of them sees things and perceives their lives. I feel like showing what they have before they lose it really helps the reader appreciate what they lost, better than if it started with 'well my parents died two months ago". The reader initially cares about (or is meant to care about) the brothers (now that you have a grasp on who they both are.) and how they're both going to cope with this tragedy.

(ideally the summary of the book would only mention ' a tragedy happens' and not spoil their deaths)


For example in Harry Potter, we never MEET Lily and James initially so we feel sorry for Harry for his predicaments but he, nor we ever really see what he lost until later. Which worked for that story.

But a good portion of the emotional conflict of this story is about the boys' grieving process so, showing what they had before hand makes sense as part of the story.

Thanks for the feedback though.

Re: AYRT

[blueonblue]

If you do sell your book, publishers will put giant spoilers on the back cover. It's what they do. :(

Re: AYRT

[(Anonymous)]

Aw...shit...


*sigh* well I guess I can't count too much on surprises...but ...I still feel like the grief theme fits the story.