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Re: Ughhhhh
(Anonymous) 2015-05-19 11:36 pm (UTC)(link)Re: Ughhhhh
(Anonymous) 2015-05-19 11:42 pm (UTC)(link)And there's a way to write it so that it doesn't come across as blatant.
Having flawed, three-dimensional characters helps immensely.
But when a character exists solely to be an object of lust, then it's an issue and I do think that's an example of POOR writing.
And, yes, I realize that this means A TON of fanfic is poorly written but, to me, that's not as much of an issue since no one is being paid and it's not for a workshop to improve your writing.
Re: Ughhhhh
(Anonymous) 2015-05-19 11:46 pm (UTC)(link)Re: Ughhhhh
(Anonymous) 2015-05-19 11:50 pm (UTC)(link)"who just so happened to have curves in all the right places, a bunch of guys hitting on her all the time (but she turns them down, naturally), and she's super sweet and kind and blah blah blah. "
Which, I've gotta say, sounds like a relationship sue if ever I've heard one.
If the author went out of his way to write a realistic 22 year old woman then I don't think it would come across as creepy.
But it's such a blatant fantasy that it does.
The age gap isn't the only issue here.
Re: Ughhhhh
(Anonymous) 2015-05-19 11:53 pm (UTC)(link)OP's post was entirely focused on the age gap, how appalling it wast that an adult 22-year-old and adult 50-year-old would be married. If OP wants to critique, she should've suggested then maybe breathing a bit more originality into the 22-year-old, and... I don't know, made her less hot?