[ SECRET POST #3209 ]

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⌈ Secret Post #3209 ⌋

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Comments

[iambecomebees]

This is advice for amateurs, by amateurs. I'd expect to see a hot tip about breaking out a thesaurus for more ~descriptive~ words.

My biggest nitpick is when people write the events/actions in one paragraph in the wrong order. People doing things after others' dialog lines (in the same paragraph), in particular. A lot of writers in fandom, despite being very good at writing otherwise, really fail at this one technical aspect of it.

[(Anonymous)]

Yes, because picking random synonyms from an Internet thesaurus turns out so well. 8)

[iambecomebees]

I did that once for a school essay a very long time ago and my teacher gave my paper a lot of very weird looks as he went over it

[(Anonymous)]

Yes, it's like placing complete trust in Google translate. :D

[(Anonymous)]

I once had a student turn in a short paper that was clearly text copied from the course textbook with various words replaced using the MS Word thesaurus function. Many of the replacement words didn't work in context, so it was like reading a Mad Libs.

[quantumreality]

There's actually a rather hefty Harry Potter fanfic in which my biggest technical gripe is that for 30+ chapters the author uses this mechanic.

"Person A speaking." Person B does something.

"Person B speaking." Person A or C does something.

On and on and ON. Mentally adjusting for that tends to make re-reading it a bit of a slog, so I only re-read it about once every three years or so.

[iambecomebees]

YES IT'S THE WOOORRRSSSTTTTTT and that's exactly what I mean. Dialog is in separate paragraphs for a reason, so one should conclude the accompanying action (which is actually a dialog not-tag) is also separated the same way! But noooooo. I would absolutely love to give a seminar on the technicalities of paragraph breaks.