[ SECRET POST #3209 ]

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⌈ Secret Post #3209 ⌋

Warning: Some secrets are NOT worksafe and may contain SPOILERS.

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Comments

[brandiweed.livejournal.com]

Would you even need the "said" clauses after each dialog sentence? Why not


"What do you want to do for dinner?" asked Steve.

Tony looked up from his tablet. "Let's get falafel."

"But we had falafel yesterday. Let's get something else."

"But falafel is good!"

"I'm not saying falafel isn't good, I'm just saying that we had it yesterday. I'm kind of in the mood for a burger, to be honest,"

"My doctor said I had to cut back on red meat."

"Why not try the grilled chicken burger, then?"

"Don't be absurd, grilled chicken isn't a burger, it's... grilled chicken. It takes all the fun out of eating a burger."

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Quality of conversation aside, unless the reader is unusually dense they can figure out who's talking from context alone.

[ketita]

My only caveat would be that you do want to break things up with a name/hint every so often, just because readers can actually lose track of the dialogue if it goes on too long with these exchanges. Tossing in a "complained Tony" or something after a while helps keep things straight.
But definitely not necessary to overuse the "said"s.