[ SECRET POST #4025 ]

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⌈ Secret Post #4025 ⌋

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[(Anonymous)]

Part of it could be Jacques' writing style? Yes, the worldbuilding is very black and white, but the style is such that for a lot of character work you have to read between the lines? I remember having the impression that not all the Abbey creatures were nice to him, talked about him as being bad just from blood alone and kept a sharp eye on him because they were certain he'd turn out bad. I don't care if you're a ferret or a squirrel, that's going to be difficult on you when the only champion is your surrogate 'mother.' Eventually, you give up and just act out.

But the worldbuilding at the time of Outcast really couldn't do the story as much justice because Jacques had embedded into people's mind some rodents good, other rodents bad with no clear reason why. In later books, yeah, it became clearer that good rodents could be bad, but not as many of the 'bad' rodents became good. (Foxes etc.)

The bones of the story were good, I think the writing let it down a little. And the ending was supposed to be a punch in the gut type of thing I think, but they didn't make Veil quite sympathetic enough for it to work. Good first attempt? -sips tea-