[ SECRET POST #5216 ]

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⌈ Secret Post #5216 ⌋

Warning: Some secrets are NOT worksafe and may contain SPOILERS.


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Notes:

Secrets Left to Post: 02 pages, 48 secrets from Secret Submission Post #747.
Secrets Not Posted: [ 0 - broken links ], [ 0 - not!secrets ], [ 0 - not!fandom ], [ 0 - too big ], [ 0 - repeat ].
Current Secret Submissions Post: here.
Suggestions, comments, and concerns should go here.

Comments

Kissing Scenes (inspired be Secret #2)

[(Anonymous)]

I'm nearly done with my fic and I want my OTP to kiss, but I can't figure out how to describe it. I'm pretty bad at kissing scenes (I generally just write, "And then they kissed", and fade to black), but I want to get better at them. It would be their first kiss after A thought B wasn't going to come back from a dangerous situation, but then B turns up on her doorstep a few weeks later and A's so happy that she just needs to kiss her. What should I focus on when they do kiss?

Re: Kissing Scenes (inspired be Secret #2)

[tabaqui]

Focus more on the emotions and the sensations (like, does A put their arms around B, is B wearing a fuzzy sweater or a leather coat or whatever, has A just smoked some weed and B smells that on them), what it means, and just leave the details about lips and teeth and tongues and whatever to a minimum.

Re: Kissing Scenes (inspired be Secret #2)

[(Anonymous)]

This. Everyone's taste is different but sometimes I'm a little squicked by how people go into too much detail about what lips/tongue/teeth feel like or what they're doing. It's just too easy to go off the rails with crashing teeth and battling tongues.

Re: Kissing Scenes (inspired be Secret #2)

[tabaqui]

Omg, this. And frankly - if you've ever accidentally 'clashed teeth', it hurts like fuck and is *not* fun.

The less said about 'battling tongues' the better. :D

Re: Kissing Scenes (inspired be Secret #2)

[(Anonymous)]

That's what got me about such a phrase... the author meant that to be passionate but if you've ever really accidentally knocked your teeth into something hard like someone else's teeth (or worse, their lower lip) it HURTS. It's not sexy or romantic, IMO. I'm also not into tongue wrestling, it just sounds like someone's a bad kisser.

Re: Kissing Scenes (inspired be Secret #2)

[tabaqui]

Yup.
I shouldn't need to get a napkin to wipe my mouth off after a kiss. Sometimes how kisses are described (or how they look on tv/movies), makes me want to go wash up. Just...ew.

Re: Kissing Scenes (inspired be Secret #2)

[(Anonymous)]

Describe what they're doing with their hands and how they feel*. The actual kiss is something that people are going to fill in with what they like in a kiss.


*Like, joy, relief, like they're finally home, etc.

Re: Kissing Scenes (inspired be Secret #2)

[(Anonymous)]

I commented on the actual secret, but gonna agree with everyone here -- focusing on feeling and sensation. Where are the hands? Can the character feel the heat of the other character's body? What is the emotion and feeling swelling within them? Is it tearing them apart slowly? Is it building, building and they can't keep their hands of the other person?

These kinds of description can really help build and set the mood, imo.