[ SECRET POST #5311 ]

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⌈ Secret Post #5311 ⌋

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Comments

Re: Writing advice -1st person

[philstar22]

i'm someone who really hates first person and almost always am going to avoid it. but one thing that stands out among the worst first person is when the character spends a lot of time talking about themselves, describing themselves, or just focusing on themselves. so probably don't have them do that.

Re: Writing advice -1st person

[(Anonymous)]

Well. Tbh the plot is literally about a murdered woman in her past in the afterlife sending her child self letters to steer her away from her eventual fate so there's probably going to be a lot of self reflection by nature.

Re: Writing advice -1st person

[(Anonymous)]

NAYRT That sounds very very cool anon. Awesome plot.

Re: Writing advice -1st person

[(Anonymous)]

Thanks!

Re: Writing advice -1st person

[(Anonymous)]

This sounds like something that I for one would 100% read

Re: Writing advice -1st person

[(Anonymous)]

Thanks!

Re: Writing advice -1st person

[(Anonymous)]

That sounds like a fascinating idea.

Er, maybe stay away from scenes where the character looks at herself naked in a full-length mirror and contemplates exactly what she looks like - but I suspect you weren't going for that, anyway.

First person is a *great* way to bring on an unreliable narrator, if that's something you enjoy - have your narrator describe events as they're happening and draw a totally wrong conclusion from what the audience is likely to. Maybe they catch on later, maybe they don't...

Ayart

[(Anonymous)]

> "Er, maybe stay away from scenes where the character looks at herself naked in a full-length mirror and contemplates exactly what she looks like - but I suspect you weren't going for that, anyway."

Oh Eugh , God no

Re: Writing advice -1st person

[(Anonymous)]

'I looked first at my pert breasts, so pert they seemed to be waving at me with every shift of my body. My luscious golden hair spilled over my shoulders, almost hiding my magnificent bosom. Like golden tree branches obscuring two perfect twin moons.
I'm sure there were other parts of me present, but I'm afraid I can't recall.'

Re: Writing advice -1st person

[(Anonymous)]

Lmao seen it too many times