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⌈ Secret Post #5344 ⌋

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Comments

Re: What are some of the most annoying fic things you hate?

[(Anonymous)]

"Mira posed and twirled for Cindy, who clapped. She took her hand and then they ran out to the car."

DA - The anon above literally showed you how to structure this to make it clear who took whose hand. You actively changed their example to make it unclear again.

Look, honestly, I haven't read your writing so I can't know how good it is. And obviously good and bad have a fairly high degree of subjectivity to them. But I will say that almost always, frequent use of epithets in a scene between characters who already know each other, does correspond to weak writing.

Re: What are some of the most annoying fic things you hate?

[(Anonymous)]

I have... Never said use epithets a lot? I have literally said, multiple times, it's fine to use them sparingly? There's such thing as middle ground! Christ, keep tiltin' at windmills, Don Quixote, they're still not giants.

Re: What are some of the most annoying fic things you hate?

[(Anonymous)]

Use of any epithets outside of some very specific circumstances is likely to hurt how your writing is perceived by readers--particularly experienced adult readers. I was trying to be gentle with you by saying "a lot" of epithets, but you are apparently too defensive to take a hint right now.

Listen to all the good advice ITT or don't, but know that if you are using epithets in your fanfic, you are almost certainly losing a significant number of your adult readers, and that eliminating those epithets will only improve how your work is perceived by readers.