[ SECRET POST #5951 ]

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⌈ Secret Post #5951 ⌋

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[(Anonymous)]

DA

That's a fault of the author tbh - a good first person POV story will have "I" the character be strong enough so that it's clearly someone else's thoughts you're reading from their perspective, not yours.

Unfortunately it doesn't work at all unless that well written and clear characterization is there, which doesn't happen too often. Especially not with writers who think their generic YA protag is different enough from others to stand out as unique and cause reader/narrator separation without effort.

[(Anonymous)]

I think that is why Aaronovitch's Rivers Of London manages it, he keeps the first person narrative conversational with the reader instead of declaritive.