[ SECRET POST #1727 ]

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⌈ Secret Post #1727 ⌋


Warning: Some secrets are NOT worksafe and may contain SPOILERS.


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Notes:

Secrets Left to Post: 09 pages, 203 secrets from Secret Submission Post #247.
Secrets Not Posted: [ 0 - broken links ], [ 0 - not!secrets ], [ 0 - not!fandom ], [ 1 - too big ], [ 0 - hit/ship/spiration ], [ 0 - omgiknowthem ], [ 0 - take it to comments ], [ 0 - repeats ]
Current Secret Submissions Post: here.
Suggestions, comments and concerns should go here.

Comments

[countess-k.livejournal.com]

"Ron has decided that Friday night is to be spent in the worst possible way Hermione can imagine. But what on earth is Draco Malfoy doing at the Museum of Quidditch?"

Ugh, this is the worst type of summary that I absolutely hate. The type where it starts with something, then suddenly takes a side road into something entirely unrelated:

"X is nearly killed in a fatal accident and lands in the hospital. Can his friends help him get through this? And what is Y doing at the nearby Crispy Creme wearing a purple hat?"

Seriously throwing the second teaser in there like that only makes me think you don't believe the first one is intriguing enough to rope me in.

[(Anonymous)]

But . . . what if there are two stories going on. I imagine a Draco fan would be glad to see that, otherwise they would skip over the story entirely, thinking it was just Hermione-centric.

[countess-k.livejournal.com]

If there are two stories and they are going to merge at some point (cause if they won't why the hell aren't they two separate stories?) then there are better ways to make a summary. Like for example: "Ron never knew going to the Museum of Quidditch was the worst possible way to spend time with Hermione, especially since Draco Malfoy is there too."

[(Anonymous)]

That sounds hella clunky.

[fred_mouse (from livejournal.com)]

And yet, the summary with the question caused me to click on the link, and yours leaves me cold.

[countess-k.livejournal.com]

So predictable guys. Never change, seriously.

[(Anonymous)]

Lol are you actually stinging because no one fawned over your ~massively superior~ summary?

The original question one and yours convey basically the same sentiment neither is outright better. It takes testicles to back up your preference using nothing but your own example, and I admire that, but this time it did not pan out, get over it.

[urplesquirrel.livejournal.com]

Except the original one was intriguing, and your rewrite is awkward at best.

[copper-dimes.livejournal.com]

Okay, I'm going to butt in and be irritating all around. Please don't take this personally, but I like the question summary better than yours (sorry). However, I don't find either one to be enticing at all. Yours, countess_k, is a bit dull and the original is awkward as hell.

Reading this: "Ron has decided that Friday night is to be spent in the worst possible way Hermione can imagine" makes so little sense to me, it's embarrassing. Is Ron trying to purposefully make Hermione uncomfortable on Friday night? That's how I read it. If this is the case, then perhaps something better might have been "Ron decides to make this Friday night one of the worst of Hermione's life by taking her to the Museum of Quidditch." The whole Quidditch museum bit at the end is optional in my view, but whatever. Then you can add whatever little blurb about Draco showing up or whatever after than.


Aaand after skimming this story, my revised summary of sorts makes no sense in the proper context, and actually, neither does yours, countess_k. Let's try again: "Hermione could think of very few things that were as dull as the Museum of Quidditch. A surprise appearance by Draco Malfoy could change all that."

Okay, so that's still shit and it kind of reads like a cheap porno, but I think it conveys what happens in the story (based on what little of it I read; it's not exactly my kind of thing as far as fic goes) without delving into question territory or a two-random-plotlines-shoved-into-one kind of thing. As I said upthread, I don't avoid question summaries (knowingly) because I've never really noticed them before. I do, however, agree that the summaries that suddenly change focus into another storyline are odd, too (though sometimes I'll click them because I'm curious to see how the two often unrelated plots are connected), so I understand what you're trying to do here.



Fuck, I hate writing summaries.

[copper-dimes.livejournal.com]

*after that

My proofreading skills leave much to be desired.

[(Anonymous)]

I think you're reading that summary wrong. Looks to me like Ron and Hermione go to the Museum of Quidditch and Draco is there. They are completely related.

[countess-k.livejournal.com]

Then it proves my point that the summary sucks. How am I, as a member of the audience, supposed to know that? It's your take and it still could be wrong unless we read the story.

Look above for a way I think that that summary could have been written that IMO would have made a lot more sense.

[deadtree.livejournal.com]

I think I should inform you that it's "Krispy Kreme", because that is a terrible thing to go through life not knowing :3

[countess-k.livejournal.com]

Don't have them where I live. Too lazy to look it up. Don't like them anyway.

[(Anonymous)]

Don't have them where I live. ... Don't like them anyway.

...So which is it?

Also you're kind of sucking in this thread. You want to lecture people on good writing but...are too lazy to make sure you've spelled the name of a famous chain correctly?