[ SECRET POST #2236 ]

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⌈ Secret Post #2236 ⌋

Warning: Some secrets are NOT worksafe and may contain SPOILERS.

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[Inda series]


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[Les Miserables and Discworld]

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03.
[Three Kingdoms 2010, Legend of Chu and Han]


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[DBSK]


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06.
[The Elder Scrolls IV: Oblivion (Shivering Isles)]


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09. [SPOILERS for ]

[Umineko no Naku Koro Ni]


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10. [SPOILERS for Supernatural]



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11. [WARNING for rape]



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12. [possible warning for sexual assault (as I'm sure the thread will contain discussion of it)]



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13. [WARNING for abuse]



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14. [WARNING for rape, abuse, etc]



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15. [WARNING for suicide]



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16. [WARNING for eating disorders]



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17. [WARNING for rape/non-con]

[Homestuck]


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Notes:

Secrets Left to Post: 00 pages, 000 secrets from Secret Submission Post #319.
Secrets Not Posted: [ 0 - broken links ], [ 1 - not!secrets ], [ 0 - not!fandom ], [ 0 - too big ], [ 0 - repeat ].
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Suggestions, comments, and concerns should go here.

Comments

[(Anonymous)]

Can I ask why? Just curious...

[(Anonymous)]

DA, but

I like that line and feel it can work very well in a fic because depending on which act you lay the emphasize on in your scene (which really should always be shaken up a little) other things can fade to the background.

Hmmm, compared it to getting undressed for example. Sometimes a fic is structured in a way that the undressing part is really a big part of the focus. You know in the case of strip-tease fics, or really slow foreplay stuff etc. In that case, I expect getting undressed to have a lot of attention and detail. Sell it to me. Describe the sensation of shirts sliding off, how buttons are being undone teasingly, how someone is getting their jeans unzipped over their erection. Cause it is one of the pillars on which you are building this fic.

But say, another time you are writing a fic that maybe focuses more on characters performing a certain kink or position or using a new toy or what not. Meaning that you are making that the pillar in your fic. In a fic like that, I wouldn't expect undressing to get more attention than 'He quickly stripped on his way to the bed, practically vibrating with excitement as he pulled out the new 15 inch bad dragon toy he had been waiting to surprise his partner with.'

Condom use is the same way to me. If that condom or the pairing using a condom is a bigger part of the narrative, then a line like in the first example works better maybe. But if condom use is just an established part of the dynamic but not something that is focus of the fic, then a line like the second one works better. Fiction is all about balancing stuff out.

[(Anonymous)]

AYRT

The first feels more forced, while the second feels more like natural actions during sex.

[(Anonymous)]

I feel like finding the second example "bad" hinges on a pessimistic outlook on readers. It's not like most people don't register words quickly (those old enough to be reading smut). A line like that is barely going to "slow" me down, it just makes me go "oh, they're using a condom" and I'm right back in the action.

It reminds me in a distant way of how novice writers will try so hard to vary "he said" "she said" dialogue tags to the point of absurdity, afraid of repetition and not realizing that the tag is virtually invisible to readers; people don't pay any mind to it unless it's made a big deal of or used incorrectly. Unless the condom use is drawn out, a reader's going to have passed over it and continued in two seconds.