[ SECRET POST #2363 ]

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⌈ Secret Post #2363 ⌋

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Comments

[(Anonymous)]

I am too.

Words like orbs have been in use for years, and all of the sudden it's not okay for those still learning how to write to use them?

[(Anonymous)]

Well, it's not "suddenly" not okay. Writers have always needed to be aware of clichés and how to avoid them.

"Orbs" is just not part of common English vernacular these days. If you're writing a period piece, it might be appropriate, but for a story set in modern times, with characters who wouldn't use that word in speech or think it, or even know what it meant, it can be unnatural and stilted rather than clever. It usually reads as tired and unnecessarily purple instead of ~poetic~ or whatnot.

[(Anonymous)]

What do you mean, suddenly? People have hated the use of 'orbs' instead of eyes for AGES.

[(Anonymous)]

The fact that a person is still learning how to write does not mean that s/he gets a pass for using cliches or for improperly using certain idioms or turns of phrase. And, truthfully, a beginner isn't ever going to learn or improve if no one ever points out the things that s/he is doing wrong. Granted, criticism should be constructive; there's never any excuse for being a dick about it.

Now, "orbs" certainly has been in use for years, but so has the line, "it was a dark and stormy night," and so has the convention of describing a character by having him/her look in a mirror. Cliches are cliches because they have been used for so long by so many people, and yes, they become annoying after a time if only because readers get sick of seeing them. Additionally, a reader may just not personally like the use of a particular descriptor or phrase, and that's okay.