[ SECRET POST #2477 ]

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⌈ Secret Post #2477 ⌋

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Comments

Character analysis ...my favorite hobby

[(Anonymous)]

Hmm....well...there's a salvageable character in there somewhere I do believe but I would say there needs to be some serious alterations.

Cut down on extracurricular activities especially if she has ADD. As someone who might have it let me tell you what is most realistic is that she should get buried under the weight of all that fumble spectacularly or just dump a bunch of stuff(or maybe take up a hobby then get bored with it and drop it). ADD has more issues than that. It means you can't sit still, sometimes it makes people impulsive (I tended to be an impulsive shopper myself. Had so much trouble saving my money.), easily distracted. It would be hard for her to sit down and finish something.

One person (especially a teenager with ADD) can hardly do all that.

Handwriting still has an impact in the age of computers. Some people still have paper applications and it would be hard to get ajob if no one could read the handwriting.

The thing about flaws is that they have to come up in the story to be flaws otherwise they're just quirks. Being unable to sing would not be a good flaw for a fighting based manga character who never HAS to sing. Try giving her something to cause actual problems.

As for the teeth. Having something attractiveness about them or having them think they're unattractive when they're not are shallow flaws. Unless her teeth have some big part of the story, they're a 'distraction'.

I'd probably think the character could be promising if she was given some depth or more flaws. I'd guess that the creator is probably young and very shy unsure about giving their character flaws perhaps out of fear they won't be liked or something. Or they're trying to make a wish fulfillment character but polish them to not look like one.


A bit on the Mary Sue side but fixable if the author is willing to actually think about flaws and make her more of a well rounded character.