[ SECRET POST #5344 ]

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⌈ Secret Post #5344 ⌋

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Comments

NAYRT

[(Anonymous)]

> They stick out like a store thumb and scream "WEAK WRITING!" from the top of their lungs.

You sound like all those "said is dead" people who give the shittiest writing advice because it's all you got growing up and all that matters is how blad white bread Le Criteeks see it, even tho they're inherently biased toward bland white cis men's writing.

Re: NAYRT

[(Anonymous)]

Oop, guess I touched a nerve.

Just know that if you're using epithets in your writing, you are losing a significant percentage of your adult readers right out of the gates.

Re: NAYRT

[(Anonymous)]

Why so rude?

Re: NAYRT

[(Anonymous)]

I think if you actually read widely and diversely, you'll find it's NOT only white cis men who are interested in what can be done with things like narrative voice and sentence structure.

The example you gave was bland and white bread, because there's no variation in the sentence structure, and no flow to it. "Character did this. Then Other Character did that." It's very flat.

In the end, there's no advice that can replace reading a lot of various kinds of really good stuff - there's a LOT of fantastic writing out there by people who aren't cis white men, especially in the SFF field - and actually study their technique and learn how they create mood and flow in their writing. You will almost never see a lot of epithets in high-level pro writing, regardless of the background of the writer.