[ SECRET POST #2223 ]

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⌈ Secret Post #2223 ⌋

Warning: Some secrets are NOT worksafe and may contain SPOILERS.

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Notes:

Secrets Left to Post: 06 pages, 127 secrets from Secret Submission Post #318.
Secrets Not Posted: [ 0 - broken links ], [ 1 - not!secrets ], [ 0 - not!fandom ], [ 0 - too big ], [ 0 - repeat ].
Current Secret Submissions Post: here.
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Comments

[keire_ke]

I find the general rule of thumb with first person is that if after reading a paragraph it's glaringly obvious it's in first person, or heaven forbid, the book starts with "I", it's going to be poor. Consider: "I boiled the kettle and then I poured the water into the teapot" versus "she boiled water and then she poured the water into the teapot." One of those sets the scene and paints a picture, the other sounds fake, because who thinks like that? Or, in the even this is explicitly a story told, how does it advance anything?

The problem with 1st person is that many authors approach it the same as they would 3rd person, when it should be radically different. They want me to believe I'm in a character's head, and the character thinks "now I'm boiling water. Now I'm pouring tea. In a minute I will eat the cookie. Oh, here is the cookie, I will take the cookie and EAT IT."

[amanuensis1]

There's a suspension of disbelief necessary with some 1st person writings, isn't there, when you say to yourself, "Who thinks like this? No one thinks like this!" It can kill the reading entirely! (This is also true for epistolary style, if you find yourself saying, "No one writes in a diary/letter this way!")