[ SECRET POST #2225 ]

[case]

⌈ Secret Post #2225 ⌋

Warning: Some secrets are NOT worksafe and may contain SPOILERS.

01.


__________________________________________________



02.


__________________________________________________



03.


__________________________________________________



04.


__________________________________________________



05.


__________________________________________________



06.


__________________________________________________



07.


__________________________________________________



08.


__________________________________________________



09.


__________________________________________________



10.


__________________________________________________



11.


__________________________________________________



12.


__________________________________________________



13.


__________________________________________________



14.


__________________________________________________



15. [repeat]


__________________________________________________



16.


__________________________________________________



17.


__________________________________________________



18.


__________________________________________________
















Notes:

Secrets Left to Post: 04 pages, 084 secrets from Secret Submission Post #318.
Secrets Not Posted: [ 0 - broken links ], [ 0 - not!secrets ], [ 1 - not!fandom ], [ 0 - too big ], [ 0 - repeat ], [ 1 - take it to comments ].
Current Secret Submissions Post: here.
Suggestions, comments, and concerns should go here.

Comments

[silverr]

Well, but that compression of action happens in a lot of fic. ~ If the action calls for someone to drive somewhere, authors will rarely articulate "and then they walked to the car, and opened the car door, and got into the car, and put the key in the ignition, and turned the key until the car started, and backed out of the garage ..." and so on - unless those actions are significant detail in some way, used to elucidate character or mood or somesuch. ~ To me, shoe removal is like that.

BUT, I do agree that ALWAYS ignoring the undressing/shoe removal is wasting an opportunity for characterization and foreplay: exhibitionism, foot fetishness, or shyness, or sleepyness (e.g., Char A takes one shoe off and then gets under the covers). I personally find the foreplay & pillow talk in erotic writing more interesting than the "Tab A - Slot B" bits.

ETA: Shoes off at the door in my house too. But for pron purposes I'll pretend we're talking about clandestine gropings in a hotel room. :p

[inkdust]

When my friend read my novel draft she laughed because I kept mentioning characters putting on their shoes to go places. But when I was writing, because most of it takes place within a sort of commune, I felt concerned that people would picture them going everywhere without them. When she called attention to it I realized that people would probably assume I just skipped that part and I felt silly.

[silverr]

But see, in the context of your novel I can see where "the putting on of shoes" could have been leveraged into a symbolic action (aka "girding the loins" which, heh heh, doesn't happen in modern times much). ~

[inkdust]

I am definitely going to think of it like that now :D thank you

[silverr]

.. and while I don't know what your commune character(s) are like, the whole play on "walking in another's shoes" could come into play, perhaps?

in short: don't always take what your beta readers say as Incontrovertible Truth. It's almost always a good starting point, but sometimes it's just off-base. :p