[ SECRET POST #2437 ]

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⌈ Secret Post #2437 ⌋

Warning: Some secrets are NOT worksafe and may contain SPOILERS.

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Notes:

Secrets Left to Post: 01 pages, 024 secrets from Secret Submission Post #348.
Secrets Not Posted: [ 0 - broken links ], [ 1 - not!secrets ], [ 1 - not!fandom ], [ 0 - too big ], [ 0 - repeat ].
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Comments

Re: Inspired by #10

[(Anonymous)]

Unclear referents. Too much 'the taller man said' is ridic, but even more ridic is scenes and scenes of three dudes talking to each other where the only referent used is 'he said' and I can't track which 'he' is saying it.

I was just going to make a post about over-using same-sex pronouns in love-scenes, but I think you've pretty much got me covered here. Because I DO feel like I'm just repeating characers' names so often that it's ridiculous, but my grammar nerdery won't let me write "He grabbed his cock" (as a very poor example) or "he laid a hand on his cheek" (as a perhaps poorer example) without reading it as if one character is touching himself.

Because yes, crazy epithets get a lot of hate, but if it's a choice between an unobtrusive epithet and ambiguous language, I'll take the epithet.

Re: Inspired by #10

[(Anonymous)]

I don't know what is an 'unobtrusive' epithet for you, but for me any variation of 'the other man' in limited third when the characters know each other and wouldn't think of each other like that is instant backbutton, because it's practically always indicative of other writing problems. The few times I've overlooked this because something about the fic caught my interest, I've always ended up regretting having wasted my time on it. Occasionally slightly ambiguous language is much easier to overlook when the writing is decent otherwise.