[ SECRET POST #3582 ]

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⌈ Secret Post #3582 ⌋

Warning: Some secrets are NOT worksafe and may contain SPOILERS.

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[Miss Fisher's Murder Mysteries]


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[Daredevil, Wilson Fisk/Vanessa Marianna]


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[Overwatch]


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[Mob Psycho 100]


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[Malcolm in the Middle]


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Notes:

Secrets Left to Post: 02 pages, 39 secrets from Secret Submission Post #512.
Secrets Not Posted: [ 0 - broken links ], [ 0 - not!secrets ], [ 0 - not!fandom ], [ 0 - too big ], [ 0 - repeat ].
Current Secret Submissions Post: here.
Suggestions, comments, and concerns should go here.

Comments

Re: narrative question

[(Anonymous)]

"If it's in 1st, you can still swap POVs for the scene by scene breaking and giving it a title such as "Interlude," and maybe italicizing it."

Ehhhh. Tbh, OP's idea of "surprise, MC is gay!" twist is already a tad heavy-handed as a way to bring the MC and his friend together. Making a fuss over the scene and setting it off with italics or as an "interlude" is only going to make that more conspicuously out of place.

Re: narrative question

[(Anonymous)]

It's not a twist/surprise for the reader. Earlier scenes establish MC is bi, and trying to process whether Friend is into guys and if telling him will hurt their friendship and their work relationship (this part is v. important, because it's not just their interests, but their employers', and the media and the public eye is on them all the time).

A majority of the story actually even takes place after MC and this friend have broken up romantically (time skips, as I said), but they still have to work together. There's snapshots of the period they were together, but they're all in the past, sort of a "how did we get to here?" I liked my scene as an idea of one of those snapshots/vignettes, but it doesn't quite fit right.

Re: narrative question

[(Anonymous)]

Sorry, I shouldn't have used the word "twist". What I meant was that sometimes when plots that involve a misunderstanding/miscommunication that serves as an obstacle between two people and their romantic relationship, it's common (and a little cliché) to have this ridiculously simple missing puzzle piece that makes everything okay and knocks that obstacle down. In this situation, the puzzle piece is "MC is actually bi and friend didn't know it".

The reason why I said these devices were a little unsubtle was that unless the writing is very good, it's super obvious that this is a contrived obstacle engineered by the author, an easy obstacle that's easily overcome with just one teensy bit of information. This isn't to say it's a bad idea, just that it's probably a good idea NOT to draw any more attention to it than absolutely necessary.

Re: narrative question

[(Anonymous)]

Okay, that makes sense. There is more to it than that, involving the secrecy of the relationship-- I'm the same anon who was asking for some thoughts on issues involving closeted characters a few weeks ago.

Basically, in the grand scheme of the story, this is unimportant for plot reasons (as you say, getting together is not that big an obstacle), but years later the boyfriend still finds that scene significant for emotional reasons because the older brother was his mentor and it's the last thing he told him before he moved on.

So I'm torn between something that's better-structured and YES THE FEELS.