[ SECRET POST #2223 ]

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⌈ Secret Post #2223 ⌋

Warning: Some secrets are NOT worksafe and may contain SPOILERS.

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Notes:

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Comments

[making_excuses]

Now I am going to sound so stupid and ehm uneducated*, but wouldn't most stories have to use more than one perspective (I think I figured out why I don't get this argument), because you can't have a story where everything is:

"John told me he liked apples, as I brushed my hand through my hair and looked up to the right I heard John sighing, he must be getting tired. He will soon start shuffling his feet, oh there it is the feet shuffling. I am getting a bit tired myself."

Versus:

"I like apples" John said sighing, Sherlock brushed his hand through his hair thinking "my Dear Watson must be tired, he is showing the signs he usually shows before he starts ranting about how tired he is, next comes the shuffling of his feet."

John shuffles his feet, turning to Sherlock

"Sherlock could we please wrap up this case so I can go to sleep soon?"

"You can't rush genius my Dear Watson, but go lie down for a moment, I wont set fire to the flat in the next hour or so"

As John lay down on the sofa to nap, Sherlock continued to solve the case "No it can't be the Teddy Bear that did it, there is no such thing as a terrorist Teddy Bear, I refuse to believe it! But where are the evidence of something else. I should wake John up and ask him! I'll just pretend to drop this book to the floor so John with his military training will wake up"

The loud sound of the book falling to the ground, shook John enough to wake him, turning to Sherlock and saying "She..."

Sherlock was back in his chair "I could hear John starting to tell me off, but the sound of his voice is already helping me solve this case! Oh I know it"

Sherlock suddenly stood up and shocked John to silence in the middle of his rant.

"John! I solved it! It was the Purple Elephant that did it!" Sherlock basically yelled

"Sherlock, how did you come to that conclusion?" John said, resigned to his fate as Sherlock's flat mate.

"It is all in the evidence, the Elephant almost had me fooled to think it was the Teddy Bear, but I see now that the Bear couldn't have done it because he is way to small to reach all the way up to the top of the shelves!" Sherlock said, barely taking a moment to breathe.

"That is great Sherlock! You finally solved the great mystery of whom stole our flour. Now can I please get back to sleep?" John said, before he finished his sentence he was halfway up the stairs to his bedroom

"John will soon see how briliant my deductions was, he was just too tired to understand them right now. Tomorrow when he wakes up he will be most grateful. Now where did I put my research on bees?"

Wow, that got a bit away from me... Anyway I guess sorry F!S and that is the first and only "fanfiction" you will ever see me write. For the obvious reasons.

*as usual I will blame the English isn't my first language thing.

[dreemyweird]

ILU and your story. It would take its well-deserved place beside "Holmes&Irene" by noodly.

But your example is third person.

See: first person is when the narrator refers to themselves as "I" in indirect speech; second is when they address somebody as "you"; third is when it's all "he", "she" and "they". The key part is that it must not be just the direct speech/thoughts, it should be the story itself.

[making_excuses]

Not enough porn for that...

Ah right, I will still blame English as a second language... Even if I should have known it, and everything. It is late and my brain is fried from doing 14 days of research in about 5 hours...

[(Anonymous)]

I think I might be misunderstanding this. Are you saying you don't think it's possible to have a story that has a strictly limited POV? I actually think that's the norm, particularly in mystery or romantic stories where having perfect knowledge of every character would ruin the suspense. Most stories are written in past tense, 3rd person subjective POV IIRC from high school english.

[making_excuses]

I didn't word myself that well, and I was thinking about this book I was reading last month and somehow my thought got slightly mixed and fanfiction happened... I dunno?

[(Anonymous)]

No worries, I find it really confusing myself. I think you've also jumped between past and present tense in your story, and the difference between those is a whole other level of confusing that people get just as wanky passionate about.
The wikipedia article on this is pretty good, if you're curious! http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Narrative_mode#Third-person_voices

[velvet_mace]

Amusingly enough all of the original Sherlock Holmes stories are written in first person from Watson's POV.